Content: - In terms of content. I think what would be good to add to this paper would be more specific explanation as to why your view is preferable to the 'designers' intentions' view. You mention with the fork example that there are cases when we don't [[know what]] a designer's intentions are. But what about cases when we do. - I like your colosseum example and fork example but are there any other non historical arguments that you could make. For example, imagine the following case: a new product is invented by Ms. Smith, she specifically says 'the [[proper function]] of this artifact is for making clothes', but nobody uses it to make clothes they use it to make curtains (sorry for the boring example, I couldn't think of anything better). Why should I say that your view is right and [[the designer]]'s intentions view is wrong in this case? How can we decide who is right in this case? - By the way, is there a difference in what the colluseum example and the fork examples are meant to show? If there is then maybe that could be made clearer. Structure: - I feel like your structure could be switched around. After your introduction I would start with 'Different theories of the origin of [[proper function]]', then the 'Artifacts and culture' part, then use these two sections to back up the reasons you think the majority of users is the right way to go. - Even if you don't want to do it this way, I would still put the view you don't like earlier in the paper than the view you do. - Your introduction could be shorter. Two paragraphs maximum, just say your view, define your terms, and say [[the structure]] of [[your paper]]. anything else should be left until the main part of the paper. - At the moment the paper is a bit short, I know you haven't quite finished the conclusion, but i think even then you could get the word count a bit closer to 3000. Adding the non-historical argument for your view which I mention above could help you hear. - Btw, remember to add references for everyone you quote e.g. Houkes and Vermaas (2010) you do this most of the time, but not every time. And, when you do your references at the end, make sure they are done in the proper format. -the correct order of name, title, year etc. Look at the reference list at the bottom of some of the articles we have read in class to see this structure.